Ella wrote a fabulous story during Daily Five writing today. Please leave her a comment to let her know what’s good about her story, or make a suggestion how she can improve it.
Ella noticed there were lots of shadows on her bedroom wall. Her teeth chattered and she squished her teddy very tightly. Her heart was beating so fast she thought it would burst right out of her. She screamed at the top of her lungs.
Her mum ran downstairs. She was very worried. She asked Ella “what’s wrong?”
“I am scared of the shadows in my room at night.”
“Oh sweetie, it’s okay. They’re only shadows.”
“But I am terrified. Can I sleep with you tonight?”
“Thank you so much Mummy. You are the best.”
“Let’s go to my bed. I am sure Dad will not mind if you sleep in my bed.”
One hour later they were all asleep. Suddenly Dad jumped. He sat up in bed and looked horrified.
Ella asked him “why are you so freaked out Dad?”
“Did you hear the noise?”
“No. Are you sure? Or are you imagining things? Go back to sleep. It’s going to be all right.”
One hour later they were all asleep. Suddenly Dad jumped again. He sat up in bed and looked terrified.
This time Mum woke up too.
“Did you hear the noise too? It sounded like a ghost!”
Mum shivered “I thought it sounded like a swamp monster!”
Just then Ella woke up. She looked at her mother and father. They were both shivering and their eyes were popping out of their heads.
“It might be just the wind. Go to sleep” she told them.
One hour later they were all asleep. Suddenly Dad and Mum both jumped again. They sat up in bed and looked totally freaked out.
“It’s definitely a ghost!”
“No, it’s definitely a swamp monster!”
Just then Ella woke up. She looked at her mother and father. They were both trembling and hugging themselves.
“”Come on guys. It’s only a noise outside and I know what it is. Let me show you.”
Ella took them over to the window. They all saw the branches of the tree scratching on the window in the strong wind.
“You were right all along. It’s no ghost or a swamp monster.”
Ella smiled. “Now let’s all get a good night’s sleep!”