ELLA AND THE SHADOW – Guest post by Ella

Ella wrote a fabulous story during Daily Five writing today. Please leave her a comment to let her know what’s good about her story, or make a suggestion how she can improve it.

Ella noticed there were lots of shadows on her bedroom wall. Her teeth chattered and she squished her teddy very tightly. Her heart was beating so fast she thought it would burst right out of her. She screamed at the top of her lungs.

Her mum ran downstairs. She was very worried. She asked Ella “what’s wrong?”

“I am scared of the shadows in my room at night.”

“Oh sweetie, it’s okay. They’re only shadows.”

“But I am terrified. Can I sleep with you tonight?”

“Well okay.”

“Thank you so much Mummy. You are the best.”

“Let’s go to my bed. I am sure Dad will not mind if you sleep in my bed.”

One hour later they were all asleep. Suddenly Dad jumped. He sat up in bed and looked horrified.

Ella asked him “why are you so freaked out Dad?”

“Did you hear the noise?”

“No. Are you sure? Or are you imagining things? Go back to sleep. It’s going to be all right.”

One hour later they were all asleep. Suddenly Dad jumped again. He sat up in bed and looked terrified.

This time Mum woke up too.

“Did you hear the noise too? It sounded like a ghost!”

Mum shivered “I thought it sounded like a swamp monster!”

Just then Ella woke up.  She looked at her mother and father. They were both shivering and their eyes were popping out of their heads.

“It might be just the wind.  Go to sleep” she told them.

One hour later they were all asleep. Suddenly Dad and Mum both jumped again. They sat up in bed and looked totally freaked out.

“It’s definitely a ghost!”

“No, it’s definitely a swamp monster!”

Just then Ella woke up.  She looked at her mother and father. They were both trembling and hugging themselves.

“”Come on guys. It’s only a noise outside and I know what it is. Let me show you.”

Ella took them over to the window. They all saw the branches of the tree scratching on the window in the strong wind.

“You were right all along.  It’s no ghost or a swamp monster.”

Ella smiled. “Now let’s all get a good night’s sleep!”

 

 

5 thoughts on “ELLA AND THE SHADOW – Guest post by Ella

  1. Dear Ella

    What a fabulous story. I am so pleased that there were no ghosts or monsters but just some branches rubbing against the window….I think that I would have been scared too if I had heard those noises. You write a terrific story; I was captivated by it from the beginning to the end.

    Thank you.

  2. Hi Ella
    What a fantastic story that you made.
    I liked the part that the mum and dad poped ther eyes out.
    You have bump it up so far.
    I think you can do better with your little brother.
    I will be more pleased that you can do a part 2.
    I think you wore conferdint of doing the story.
    You really baned the boring bits.
    I really liked everyone in your family got frightened.
    From Antonio

  3. Hi Ella,
    That story what so awesome. I liked the part when you were scared of shadows and had to sleep with your mum. And I also liked the part when dad freaked out and woke you up. At the end after all it just was a windy branch.

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