Hannah made a good plan for her story and then wrote her first draft. With the help of Isabella and Chanel, she added more detail to make her story come alive. Please leave a comment to let her know what she has done well.

“What do you want for your birthday Alannah?” asked her Mum.

“I want a dog.”

“Sorry, I can’t get you a dog. I don’t have enough money.”

Alannah ran to her bedroom crying.

She woke up on her birthday. She found a box beside her bed. She lifted the lid a little bit and peeked in. Two soft ears!  A furry tail!  A pink nose!

“A rabbit! I wanted a dog!  It’s not fair! It’s my birthday!” she sobbed.

Her Mum came in.  Alannah tried to look happy. “Thank you for the rabbit.” But deep inside her heart she really wanted a dog.

Day by day Alannah came to love her rabbit.  Rose the rabbit was very loving. Rose the rabbit was very sweet. Rose the rabbit was very smart. She was so smart that she learnt to do tricks.  A backflip!  A massive jump!  A cartwheel!  She could beg and dance and play dead.

While her dad was reading the newspaper at the dinner table Alannah noticed an ad on the cover. PET SHOW THIS SATURDAY.

At the pet show Alannah felt nervous. She told herself “it’s okay. It will be just like at home, but with more people. Rosie will do her


And she did.

Alannah took the trophy proudly from the judge. When she showed her dad, she told him “who needs a pet dog any way? My rabbit Rosie won the show!”


BRRIINNG BRRIIING! went the alarm clock. Charlie looked out the window and decided today was a good day to go on another journey to collect some teeth.

Why did this girl collect teeth? Well, she was a tooth fairy and needed the teeth to decorate her new house.  Her castle looked so nice and sparkly all decorated with teeth.

That night everyone was quiet.  Perfect! Time to collect some more teeth. She went to the next house and tiptoed up the stairs. CRASH!  She tripped over a toy. The sleeping girl was startled and woke up.  She turned on the light. She felt something under her pillow.

Yes, yes, yes!

“Hello tooth fairy. Are you tired? Would you like to stay and rest? I will make a little bed for you.”

The tooth fairy smiled and soon she was fast asleep.

The girl woke up early in the morning while the tooth fairy was still asleep.

“I don’t want to let this tooth fairy go” she thought. “This is my only chance to have my very own tooth fairy.”

She put the tooth fairy in a container with some food but the tooth fairy was really not asleep. When the girl left her bedroom the tooth fairy found herself trapped in the box and tried to get out but she couldn’t get herself out.

“I’m never going to get back to my home” she cried.

Later that day the girl’s mum went in to put the clothes away. A noise made her jump! It was coming from a box.  It sounded like crying. She looked and saw the tooth fairy.

“What are you doing in the box, little fairy? You don’t belong in there. I will set you free. After all, you have got work to do all over the world.”

She let the tooth fairy out and then she was free at last and was happy.

When the little girl came home from school she raced into her bedroom and opened the box. EMPTY!

“Mum, it’s gone!” she screamed.

“Yes, you know you can’t keep creatures in a box” said her mother.

The tooth fairy never came to visit the girl again. The girl was left with all her old teeth under her pillow forever.